对14楼提点语法建议:
第一句By all accounts Treasure Pavilion will be open.话说这句我没看懂。account在这里做什么讲?是不是想说大家都说要开藏宝阁?如果是的话可以说it is said that TP will be opened .
第二句IT make me very depressed duing to buying a friend's ID。首先 it makes,第二,duing to buying a friend's ID.貌似应该是due to the bye of a friend's ID.
第三句heart, and then I jump poop-poop choose right down all sold diamond.这句不知道想表达什么意思,不好说
第五句.I don't know weather Treasure Pavilion will be open or not。weather 和whether要分清楚!!!还有 be opened
第六句 let me very, very not calm, every day you are cursed。少主语,it let me very, very not calm。后半句是中式英语,every day 应该放后面
其他的还没想出来,欢迎大家继续